WALT: Write a short paragraph about my BEST part of the holiday.
My best day was when Vivian, Min, Eric, Mum and I went to the Noel Leeming SELL OUT!!! My favourite part was playing on the Play-station 5. The game that I was playing was HALO 5.
WALT: Re-Craft our writing
WILF: Hook, show don’t tell
OMG! Look at all of those people at the Noel Leeming Sell out. “We have to get in there quick if we want to buy something”Said Mum so we hightailed threw the door. We looked around then I saw there was a free try on the Play-station 5 so I ran there as quick as I can grabbed the controller and start playing.